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Peer Reiew Letters
Dear Stephanie,
I feel like you are off to a good start. You can relate your narrative back to the discussions in class a little more. Talk more about the materials you used and how they affected your reading and writing. Connect your narrative with Brandt or Malcolm X more in detail. You need more details on why it is important to you. What you gained and what you got out from writing this paper. Overall your paper is good.
Sincerely,
Alexis
Dear Stepanie,
Your introduction is very Written. You made it interesting from he start and went straight into your narrive. I like that In your lit narrative you use you wrote a lot of personal examples. While why it was important to you how t read and write English, you need to discuss your attitude
towards it. I know you mention that you didn’t want to learn English. Expand on that. Talk about how you felt about learning and how you feel about it now. Also talk about how learning English was difficult but you have gotten much better. For all the reader knows you could still be struggling with reading and writing. Elaborate on your personal skills.Tell us if some things are still hard when you see them. While you do mention Brand’s articles you don’t mention the terms we used in class. You need to use the terms we learned in class to show how they affected you. Talk more about bilingual opportunities. Expand on how it will help you in the future. While I believe this is a very good lit narrative you still need to expand on it.
Sincerely,
Shannon Larmond
Dear Stephanie,
Your story on how you overcame the English language barrier is very similar to my cousins from Cuba. They too were placed in ESOL classes but they hated it. It would be very interesting if you went into detail about the processes of what exactly happens in ESOL classes and what techniques they used to help you learn English. You introduction immediately grabbed my attention. As far as formatting, I would say you have a
strong conclusion. You talk a lot about the opportunities you will be have. What are the reasons for those opportunities?
Sincerely,
Orlando
Dear Stephanie,
I feel like you are off to a good start. You can relate your narrative back to the discussions in class a little more. Talk more about the materials you used and how they affected your reading and writing. Connect your narrative with Brandt or Malcolm X more in detail. You need more details on why it is important to you. What you gained and what you got out from writing this paper. Overall your paper is good.
Sincerely,
Alexis
Dear Stepanie,
Your introduction is very Written. You made it interesting from he start and went straight into your narrive. I like that In your lit narrative you use you wrote a lot of personal examples. While why it was important to you how t read and write English, you need to discuss your attitude
towards it. I know you mention that you didn’t want to learn English. Expand on that. Talk about how you felt about learning and how you feel about it now. Also talk about how learning English was difficult but you have gotten much better. For all the reader knows you could still be struggling with reading and writing. Elaborate on your personal skills.Tell us if some things are still hard when you see them. While you do mention Brand’s articles you don’t mention the terms we used in class. You need to use the terms we learned in class to show how they affected you. Talk more about bilingual opportunities. Expand on how it will help you in the future. While I believe this is a very good lit narrative you still need to expand on it.
Sincerely,
Shannon Larmond
Dear Stephanie,
Your story on how you overcame the English language barrier is very similar to my cousins from Cuba. They too were placed in ESOL classes but they hated it. It would be very interesting if you went into detail about the processes of what exactly happens in ESOL classes and what techniques they used to help you learn English. You introduction immediately grabbed my attention. As far as formatting, I would say you have a
strong conclusion. You talk a lot about the opportunities you will be have. What are the reasons for those opportunities?
Sincerely,
Orlando